Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

56 posts · 2007-11-30 04:26:30 to 2008-01-29 11:14:27

#36300361808 11/30/2007 04:26:30 Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

Everyday, for nearly 3 years, we have logged into the closest thing to the Matrix that can be and continued the saga of Man vs. Machine. The Matrix Online Community is the most talented and committed group of people on the world wide web ranging from Role Play to mastering the combat system to philosophical arguments based in the Matrix Universe. And this is a little contest to highlight the talents of the community.


A Story Contest: Calling All Authors II

The purpose of this contest is to share your stories and ideas with the community. Post your story here. I will read them and judge them on the following criteria:

I. Creativity
          A. Original Ideas
          B. Entertaining
II. Quality
          A. Style
          B. Grammar
          C. Overall Quality
III. Length - At least one page if viewed on a word processor using:
          A. Times New Roman font
          B. Font size of 12

Stories will be judged on the 5 criteria listed above (Originality, Entertainment, Overall Style, Grammar and Overall Quality). Length will not be an issue in judgment if the quality is high. (A story that is too short and does not tell a full, entertaining story will not receive a high score, nor will a long winded, boring story.)

Each criteria will be given a score between 1 and 5 (1 being the weakest score and 5 the strongest)
Once each criterion is given a score, all 5 scores will be averaged into a final score.

For example:

Vesuveus' Story
Originality        4
Entertainment      3
Overall Style      4
Grammar            5
Overall Quality    2

4+3+4+5+2=18     -->      18/5 = 3.6 Final Score


Entries must be posted in this thread no later than 11:59:59 PM PST on Sunday, January 6th, 2008. Entries posted after that time will not be considered for the contest. Please only 1 post per story. (No reposting the same story with revisions. Revisions will not be considered.)

You must submit your own entry. Stories submitted for someone else will not be considered.

Heading: I am keeping the format as simple as possible. Creatively, you can take your story in any direction you wish. However there are a few things that must be posted along with your story:

1. Title (underlined)
2. Character Handle
3. Server (in italics)

Example: Who is Mohandas? by 3y3p0pp3r of Recursion.

You have one month to write, revise and post your story. Get at it now because time will fly! You never know when the Devs will spring an event on us.

Prizes: I will award 3 authors. 1st prize, 2nd prize and 3rd prize.

Prizes are Semi-Finalized. I say this because I may ADD items to each prize (specifically 2nd and 3rd Real Prize). Each prize winner is entitled to both Real prizes and In-game prize items.

It costs nothing to enter the contest. However, I ask that if you win a prize that you cover shipping cost that I may send the items to you. The in-game items will be rewarded via e-mail or character to character trade.


Grand Prize
Real: Real Black Fedora (Shown here), Real Prop Disks
In-Game: Industrial Fedora, 340 Insecticides

2nd Prize
Real: Early Release MxO Limited Edition Poster (picture to be posted), Real Prop Disks
In-Game: Industrial Fedora, 200 Insecticides

3rd Prize
Real: Real Prop Disks
In-Game: Industrial Fedora, 100 Insecticides


Original Contest
Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300361812 11/30/2007 04:30:08 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
I don't see the image of the hat =/
Photobucket
#36300361814 11/30/2007 04:33:49 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Valeth wrote:
I don't see the image of the hat =/

Linky
Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300361816 11/30/2007 04:35:49 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Kudos to this competition. Good luck everyone.

Now if only I was good at story writing. SMILEY
#36300361817 11/30/2007 04:35:59 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Vesuveus wrote:
Valeth wrote:
I don't see the image of the hat =/

Linky
Thanks, nice hat.
Photobucket
#36300361819 11/30/2007 04:38:02 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Valeth wrote:
Vesuveus wrote:
Valeth wrote:
I don't see the image of the hat =/

Linky
Thanks, nice hat.

OP Fixed. Thanks.
Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300361853 11/30/2007 05:41:53 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
I'd rather have the poster than the hat... If we get first place can we choose to be second place? SMILEY

What do you mean by real prop disks? Like floppy disks?
#36300362543 11/30/2007 19:13:30 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

That would leave the 2nd prize winner without a prize. I suppose you can arrange a trade prior to me sending them out...

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300364658 12/04/2007 02:02:40 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

What about the people who don't speak english? Can you accept a work in spanish or you would go easy on the gramma?
#36300364686 12/04/2007 03:28:03 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Caini wrote:

What about the people who don't speak english? Can you accept a work in spanish or you would go easy on the gramma?

I won't limit anyone to language. I will have to do my very best to judge the grammar. I do have spanish speaking/reading friends to call upon, also.
Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300364718 12/04/2007 04:58:02 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

Ooohh.

#36300364730 12/04/2007 05:30:42 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
I'll be writing one over christmas.

Beware.
#36300364756 12/04/2007 06:34:18 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Does it have to be set in the Matrix or/and MxO world?
#36300364813 12/04/2007 08:42:08 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Can you submit something you've already written?
#36300364979 12/04/2007 14:03:09 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
For Xeros: Could the grand prize winner choose between the fedora or the limited edition poster? And how many submissions may be made per person?
#36300365114 12/04/2007 17:55:18 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
I suppose I'll enter, if just for kicks.

~V
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#36300365153 12/04/2007 19:00:30 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Eh what the hell ...I'll try too SMILEY
#36300365163 12/04/2007 19:36:32 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

exsuscito wrote:

Does it have to be set in the Matrix or/and MxO world?

Yes. Just to continue the theme of MxO and these forums. It can be a side story like the comics, non canon, etc.

PBlade wrote:

Can you submit something you've already written?

Yes. Feel free to revise or edit for this contest.

MxO-Insertion wrote:

For Xeros: Could the grand prize winner choose between the fedora or the limited edition poster? And how many submissions may be made per person?

I am going to have to hold firm on the prizes. As I stated above, trade arrangements can be made prior to me sending out the prize.

You can submit as many entries as you would like.

Just please submit one story per post following the format listed in the OP.

Message edited by JK_Rowling on 12/04/2007 10:46:57.

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300365581 12/05/2007 11:40:18 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

EDIT:  Oops, my question got answered.  SMILEY

Lyr

#36300366351 12/06/2007 13:35:18 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Survivor's Guilt by Illyria1 of Recursion.
#36300366372 12/06/2007 13:58:54 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Waking Dream by Illyria1 of Recursion.
#36300366594 12/06/2007 20:12:10 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Neoteny wrote:
Conflict, The Story of Jonathan Reed by Neoteny of Recursion.

Illyria22 wrote:
Survivor's Guilt by Illyria1 of Recursion.


Thank you for the entries and 2 perfect examples of the proper format for entries.

Keep in mind, the text can be posted here in a post (if it will fit in one post) as well as the linked entries above.

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300366628 12/06/2007 21:37:52 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Bad time to realize I never finish my stories....
#36300366687 12/07/2007 01:28:16 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
TimeMaker wrote:
Bad time to realize I never finish my stories....

You've got until 11:59PM PST on January 1st, 2008. I may extend it by a few days seeing as it is right after 2 major holidays. Not too long, though. January is my lightest month besides the summer, so I have lots of time to read a lot. And by the looks of things, I'll need all the time I can get.
Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300368059 12/10/2007 07:15:50 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
I'm in
#36300368064 12/10/2007 07:23:48 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

I have a crippling case of being totally uninspired, at this point.  Alas, I can't see me entering. 

Good luck to all.

#36300368113 12/10/2007 09:01:20 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
exsuscito wrote:

I have a crippling case of being totally uninspired, at this point.  Alas, I can't see me entering. 

Good luck to all.

Thank god your work is utterly dreadful
#36300371209 12/15/2007 11:11:42 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
To reach for the sky by Skyscream of Syntax
#36300372352 12/17/2007 12:47:14 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

Thank you for the entries so far!

9 stories submitted by 7 different authors!


Announcement:

I have extended the deadline for entries due to the deadline lying too close to the holidays. The extra week should allow for things to settle a bit before making final revisions and submissions.

Entries must be posted in this thread no later than 11:59:59 PM PST on Sunday, January 6th, 2008.

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300373638 12/19/2007 23:24:56 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Thanks for the extension.  I've been crazy busy with work and finals.  Hopefully I can get some writing in next week and finish this thing up.
#36300379820 01/02/2008 11:07:52 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Vesuveus wrote:

Thank you for the entries so far!

9 stories submitted by 7 different authors!


Announcement:

I have extended the deadline for entries due to the deadline lying too close to the holidays. The extra week should allow for things to settle a bit before making final revisions and submissions.

Entries must be posted in this thread no later than 11:59:59 PM PST on Sunday, January 6th, 2008.


There are only a few more days to get your entries in!

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300379905 01/02/2008 14:20:45 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
great idea! 
where do we post our stories?  as replies, or what?
#36300379930 01/02/2008 15:00:47 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
deebo wrote:
great idea! 
where do we post our stories?  as replies, or what?


Yeah, post a reply with the story or a link to the story (if it's too long). Please see the format above and the other entries as examples.

Good luck!

Two years of living the dream... and interpreting it! ~Variel
#36300380026 01/02/2008 17:30:37 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Vesuveus wrote:

There are only a few more days to get your entries in!


Thanks for reminding me. I forgot that I was planning on entering this. Hopefully I can whip something up by Sunday.
#36300380383 01/03/2008 10:11:43 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

The New Bunk by Covenant on Recursion.

Vesuveus, I don't envy your job in judging this contest!  It's great to see such high-quality work from everyone.

#36300380672 01/03/2008 21:59:26 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Cerberus for the Child

by deeboTheReturn, on Recursion

probably not quite like the others, as this isn't the type of writing i normally do, but very fun. 
hope you enjoy.
#36300381451 01/05/2008 16:58:40 Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Just to let ya know, I'm most certainly entering.

I'm 2/3 done...hope you like it when I post it up later tonight/tomorrow morning ^^.
#36300381565 01/05/2008 23:10:08 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Now, please note that there are multiple parts that are to be released on a weekly basis, so there are things left unsaid and unexplained.

I hope that it adds a bit more intrigue to the story SMILEY.


http://forums.station.sony.com/mxo/...25�


#36300381776 01/06/2008 13:29:14 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes

Precious Cargo, by Garama of Recursion


I dread walking slowly up the steep stairs yet another time.  But it is what I'm good at.  Stealth, intuition, and protection.  And a burst of energy if it's needed.  That is me, that is what I do. 

Turning to look over my shoulder at my cargo, I make eye contact, then put my index finger in front of pursed lips, trying my best telepathically to communicate the word "quiet."  What I was trying not to convey was danger ahead.  I need him to believe we'll make it, and move quickly.  And we are only at the start of our long path to his freedom.

The shortest route to the safehouse is seared into my brain.  We can stay indoors most of the way, running through an alley, more buildings, and up another shorter set of stairs when we finally make it to the right address.  But since my cargo today is a thinker, there's not much brawn to him.  I'll have to scout ahead every so often to take out the local crew--without alerting the agent programs to what I'm up to.

My cell phone chimes like the ticking of a clock.  I press answer and hold it to my ear.  "I see you have the target.  Move as fast as you can.  Keep your wits about you.  I'm having trouble deciphering the encryption." I whisper back the names of colleagues in the area and ask the operator to contact them.  We might need their help, especially when we hit the extraction point.  "I'll put calls in.  They'll contact you directly.  Good luck, ma'am."  Ahhh, there's the reminder of how old you are, I think to myself, of how long you've been in the Matrix.  But then I remember.  My operator is just a kid, a freeborn, not able to see the matrix for himself.  Of course, I'm his "ma'am."  What else would I be?  It's just a show of love and connection, like I would call him "kiddo" or "youngster."  Or "freeborn." 

I'm sidetracking, and I need to stay focused.  Tonight is too important.

We make it to the door leading to the roof.  I turn back to Mr. Thinker and once again make eye contact.  "Stop following me."  Thinker hunkers back as I turn the doorknob and push the door outward a crack to look out.  I don't see the gang members who usually hang on the roof.  Why not?  Cautiously, I step outside and peer around the corner.  It's too still.  What's happening?  In the shadows I spot a pipe leading to the ground.  We can use that and make it down, then go inside the next building.  I creep back to the doorway and look at Thinker.  "Follow me," I say.  "Quietly," I add.

As I lead him to the pipe, I notice him shivering.  I think to myself how frightened he must be, not knowing what experience he's about to go through.  "Look, these people will take care of you--the real you, the you that you were meant to be, the life that you were meant to live," I whisper.  "You will finally know the truth.  Isn't that worth it?"  Thinker looks me squarely in the eyes, piercing into my mind.  He says in a low voice "I don't know if I'm ready for the truth.  I just know something is wrong."  Just like every other bluie I've been responsible for, those words will never leave me.

We walk our way down, holding the pipe and stepping down the wall of the building.  I see the local gang thugs beyond the wall.  I hurry with Thinker into a door leading to the next building.  Up the stairs and through another door is a bar and pool hall.  "Stop following me," I say to Thinker.  He wanders up to the bar.  As I leave through the front door, I yell back at him "No alcohol."  Then I open the door and venture out.

My cell phone ticks again.  I listen.  "Evening, my love.  I hear you want help?"  It's Jeremy, he lives in this neighborhood.  "J, I may need you.  I'm doing an escort out to the edge, the safehouse."  I glance down the throughway between buildings.  No one in sight.  What the hell gives?  "Anything for you, my love.  Where should I meet up?" Jeremy asks.  "J, we've made it past the barrier.  Be at the access node.  Oh, and I've got a Thinker.  Very precious to Zion.  He's skittish.  Not a fighter.  I must get him inside the safehouse, whatever the cost."

"Now, you know I'll make sure everything's passable for you and you get him there alive," Jeremy assures me.  Then, as if he reads my feelings, "Still sensitive about the ma'am thing, are you?"  Oh, very funny.  "You know what, J?  There was Richard Pryor, and then there's you!"  We both laugh.  But yeah, I'm still sensitive about the ma'am thing.

Under the street lamp is a local ganger.  Of course he won't bother me, he can sense I'm too powerful.  But if I bring Thinker through the door, he'll be all over him, and probably call in a couple helpers.  I give him a look, I draw my rifle, and shout out "Say a prayer because your life is over."  Two shots take him down.  I look around because those shots were loud.  Anyone there?  I see no one.  Only his lifeless body sprawled on the ground.

I re-enter the building and head for the bar.  To Thinker I say, "Follow me."  I lead him outside, and into the next building.  We pass the elevator and the security staff room.  We get to the door leading outside.  "I'll go out again and clear the way," I say.  "Stop following me."  Thinker looks at me hard.  What's with this guy?  I'm helping him out, doesn't he realize even that?

I look out the door and there's a cluster of gang affiliates.  I phone J.  "We could use you about now.  We're blocked in."  Jeremy, optimistic as ever, gives me his song-and-dance.  "I'll be there before you even know it."  And true to form, he's there and kicking butt.  I join him to defeat the last of the gang.  "I better take my Thinker and get going before any agents show up."  "Good idea," he agrees.  I go back to the building's door, pull it outward, and look inside.  I spot Thinker, lock eyes, and say loudly, "Follow me."  Thinker obeys, and we head into the next building.

One more building after this, and we're home free.  I stop and pivot.  "Now is the time to be at peace.  We've just about reached the extraction point in the next building.  So now is the beginning of the rest of your life."  Thinker gives me the deer-in-the-headlights look.  My God, I wonder to myself, what is happening in this darn war?  I know this guy will be a help at the end of it, but at what price?  And isn't he just a child?

We pace through the building.  At the door to the outside, I stop and leave him there again.  I go through the door, to a hail of gunfire.  My colleague J jumps down from the roof.  I sweep gunfire back and forth to help kill the gang members.  We defeat them, and J says to me "All right, Zion for the win this time out."  Yeah, I think to myself, this time out.  Then he says "Ma'am, we got your target to the extraction point.  Zion will cover them from here."  Well, I couldn't really argue with that.  Another Zion operative in the making?

We make it into the last building.  We climb the stairs to our floor.  Zion operatives control the room that we enter, and they grab Mr. Thinker from me.  "You did it again, ma'am," an operative says to me.  I'm proud to give them Mr. Thinker, a life that perhaps will further free Zion minds and strengthen them against the simulation.  He says "Thank you," and "Please keep in touch."  Oh, really now?  Well, that's a first.  Perhaps I will, perhaps that is my destiny.

"Great job yet again, ma'am."  Yes, well, perhaps I have judged wrongly.  "Ma'am" is not a pejorative, it's a recognition of my importance to Zion.  Thinker has made it to the outside, he will surely be instrumental to the arguments against the system.  I glance at him once more before he's moved to his custom jack-out seat.  He looks deeply into my eyes, clears his throat, and says distinctly "Ma'am, thank you.  For saving my life."  I stare back at him, the Mr. Thinker, the Zion baby, and answer sincerely "You're welcome, Kiddo."  Yes, I'm sensitive about ma'am.  But Zion always comes first.

Tonight, Zion wins!  Long live Zion!

#36300382615 01/07/2008 20:31:51 Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Well, now that the contest is over, I'd like to wish everyone good luck!

I know we all did great SMILEY.
#36300382626 01/07/2008 20:53:30 Re:Calling All Authors II - Real Life Prizes
Mine might not be within deadline, but at least I got it posted!  No small feat for me SMILEY