Existance.

5 posts ยท 2006-08-25 06:39:33 to 2006-08-29 07:06:39

#36300033217 08/25/2006 06:39:33 Existance.
This is the first attempt i've had at Poetry, so any feedback would be really, really appreciated:

The Operative's Existance.

The job we do requires volition,
So this, it seems, is stark admission,
That in the struggle, in the strife,
We lose the things that give us life,
Our compassion, and our greif,
Are usless weapons we must sheath,
So we may march, emotions null,
To do our duty to the full.

To meet, perchance, to fight,
- One sole moment, all one's might,
To take a blade within my grasp,
- I'd do as well with Knife or Asp,
A sport so dark in its endeavour,
Requires, surely, something clever,
Something cunning in its dealings,
Creating darker, hollow feelings,
So when, at last, the crimson flows,
The victor no emotion shows.

This is the very art of darkness,
A skillfull act, for all its starkness,
Taking life without remorse,
With such a simple show of force.

This is the path that we have chosen,
Now nothing's warm, yet nothing's frozen,
And when we're done, we get to mend,
Before the rythym starts again.

But next time luck may not us choose,
Still, one will win and one will lose.
#36300033281 08/25/2006 09:37:39 Re:Existance.
I like it, actually, I was thinking about using it for an opening blurb of one of my chapters if you'll let me.
#36300034881 08/28/2006 09:07:39 Re:Existance.
SMILEY wicked ....
#36300035530 08/29/2006 03:39:43 Re:Existance.
what riac said.........................................!SMILEY
#36300035675 08/29/2006 07:06:39 Re:Existance.
Very cool stuff! SMILEY